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Post by `` OWNER on Dec 11, 2009 12:31:24 GMT -5
Declined.
Please refer to the 'How to Apply' thread for the correct subject form.
Also, please do not italicize your application.
'History' was also not apart of the application form. Please change 'History' to 'Other.' |
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Post by `` OWNER on Dec 11, 2009 13:05:02 GMT -5
Pending.
On either side of her flanks were matching scars
I'm assuming the scars are still on her rump, and so that should probably say 'are?' Also, how tall is your mare? That needs to be included, please.
Minimum of 150 words to role-play on Cappadocia. You are at 141. Please edit it, and also ensure that all your posts are at least 150 upon your acceptance.
Your role-play is also very confusing. You switch between tenses a lot in your first paragraph.
ashen stone chipped hooves
Are you aware that you use three words to describe her hooves? It's excessive. Try restricting your description of things to 2 words, unless you are describing the subject in multiple sentences.
Again, you shift between tenses in your 'other' as well. |
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